children should do fitness

This week we are writing exposition and our topic was 'children should do fitness'. It was easy to write because we sat in a small group and got help when we needed it from our teacher. I fond hared to find response.

my weekly plenary week 2

It is my weekly plenary week 2

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it was our technology

EXPOSITION WRITING

we are writing about should children get pocket money

EXPOSITION WRITING TERM 4

My Goals: 3 areas that I need to work on to improve my Exposition writing (from the rubric)

1. Reading

2. Question

3. Answer

Yes ‘ all children should get pocket money’

Planning: My reasons, why I agree or disagree ( you will pick only 3)

Save up to buy what you want.	Forget lunch your can buy it	Saving to start your adult life

Writing

Title of your exposition	My Notes	My Writing
Orientation/Opening -Start with a Rhetorical Question -state your opinion -give your 3 reasons why you think this	yes  all children should get pocket money 1.Save up to buy what you want. 2.Forget lunch your can buy it . 3.Saving to start your adult life .	Have you ever been paid for doing your chores?I haven’t but iI firmly believe that all children should be given pocket money. Pocket money is that parents give their children to buy something for themselves. But if children do all their work then they will get paid at the end of the week. Children should get pocket money Firstly save up to buy what you want Secondly forget lunch your can buy it Finally saving to start your adult live.
Point 1 Expand on your first reason. Why do you think this? Why is it important?	1.Save up to buy what you want. -so you don’t need to ask parents to buy it for you they can’t always afford. - buy exactly what we want.	Firstly,  I believe  that  the children should get pocket money because they can  save up  to buy what they want . if we have our own money then we  don’t need to ask our parents because they can’t always afford it and they might not buy exactly what we want .
Point 2 Expand on your second reason.	2.Forget lunch your can buy it . - in a rush and we forget - late -slept in/ no time to make it . - early chores -no time	Secondly,  children should earn pocket money because if for some reason they go to school and forget their lunch they will able  to buy their own lunch.
Point 3 Expand on your third reason.	3.Saving to start your adult life . -university education -travel -deposit  for a house -buy a car	Finally, with the pocket money they earn they can save for the future thing  like house or car or iphone.
Conclusion Restate your opinion and why You might recommend something for the reader to do or think. Why should they think the same as you?	I think we all should get  pocket money but we just need to work	I think we all should get  pocket money but we just need to work

Teacher feedback: (what do you want Mrs Henare and Mrs Cowles to focus on in your writing?) I would like to please look at….

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